[原创]今天修改了维基百科全书中关于ROBERTO AYALA的词条，爽！

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以下是引用joey_zhou在2006-11-3 05:18:00的发言：

国内的朋友可能不大熟悉维基百科全书 (WIKIPEDIA)。这应该算是网上最权威的英文百科全书。

我用GOOGLE搜索一下ROBERTO AYALA，第一条结果就是维基百科全书对他的介绍。

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Roberto_Ayala

点开一看，别的还好，对老鼠的国家队生涯是这么介绍的。

Ayala played for Argentina at the 1996 Summer Olympics, winning the silver medal. He played for Argentina in the 1998 World Cup and was a non-playing squad member in the 2002 competition due a last minute injury. He was then selected as an over-age player as Argentina won the gold medal at the 2004 Summer Olympics.Ayala was also named to the Argentine squad for the 2006 FIFA World Cup in Germany, but unfortunately, he missed a penalty in the quarter-final shootout against Germany.

阿亚拉参加96年奥运会并活得银牌。他参加了98年世界杯，在02年世界杯上因为最后一分钟的伤病而无法上场。他作为一名超龄队员参加04年奥运会并获得金牌。阿亚拉参加了06年世界杯，遗憾的是他在四分之一决赛对德国的点球大战中射失点球。

前面都不错，看到最后简直气晕我，难道老鼠在06年世界杯上做的唯一事情就是射失点球吗?

维基百科全书最好的一点，是他允许读者参与编辑。我把他的国家队生涯编辑为:

Ayala played for Argentina at the 1996 Summer Olympics, winning the silver medal. He played for Argentina in the 1998 World Cup and was a non-playing squad member in the 2002 competition due a last minute injury. He was then selected as an over-age player as Argentina won the gold medal at the 2004 Summer Olympics 。Ayala played an integral part in the Argentine squad for the 2006 FIFA World Cup in Germany. He played brilliantly throughout the tourment and was picked as one member of the All Star Team. In the quarterfinal against Germany he scored a beautiful header that gave Argentina the 1-0 lead. Unfortunately, Argentina lost the penalty shootout after the 1-1 tie.

One of the best defenders in Argentina history, Ayala also shared the most capped hounour with Diego Simone. He played 106 times for the national team as of Novermber 2006, many times as captain.

2006年世界杯阿亚拉是阿根廷队中最重要的成员。整个杯赛他表现极为出色，入选最佳阵容。在对德国的八強賽中，他的一记漂亮头球使阿根廷1-0先。遗憾的是阿根廷被扳平后在点球大战中败北。

阿亚拉是阿根廷历史上最佳后卫之一。他和西蒙尼分享为国家队出场最多次数的荣誉。截止2006年11月，他为阿根廷队一共出场106次，并多次担任队长一职。

红字是我修改的部分。

修改完毕，感觉很爽！

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       第一句按照你中文的意思也许这样更好：Ayala played a pivotal role in the Argentine squd...第二句不要再用play做动词了，可以改成maintained exceptional performance throughout...避免redundancy。你觉得呢？